A haiku poem by
Submitted Dec 23, 2006, 11:21:31 PM
An open casket,
A woman crying softly,
The snow falls slowly...
Commented Nov 22, 2009, 6:45:50 PM
your writing is getting better al the time good buddy;
Good tale, well done. :)
Commented Nov 23, 2009, 2:11:30 AM
This is good. A nice plot twist. And a bit overdue. :|
Could use just a tad of punctuation and mechanical cleaning.
Commented Nov 26, 2009, 1:54:00 AM
Nice story. I like the beginning, with the rockets hitting the building. Reminded me of Live Free or Die Hard for some reason.
Commented Nov 26, 2009, 10:58:40 PM
Fantastic Blue. Absolutely loved the diner scene.
Dialogue was great and totaly in character. This flowed better than any other chapter so far.
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