Winter

An open casket,
A woman crying softly,
The snow falls slowly...

Comments

Commented Nov 22, 2009, 6:45:50 PM

your writing is getting better al the time good buddy;

Good tale, well done. :)

Commented Nov 23, 2009, 2:11:30 AM

This is good. A nice plot twist. And a bit overdue. :|

Could use just a tad of punctuation and mechanical cleaning.

Commented Nov 26, 2009, 1:54:00 AM

Nice story. I like the beginning, with the rockets hitting the building. Reminded me of Live Free or Die Hard for some reason.

Commented Nov 26, 2009, 10:58:40 PM

Fantastic Blue. Absolutely loved the diner scene.
Dialogue was great and totaly in character. This flowed better than any other chapter so far.

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