A haiku poem by
Submitted Apr 29, 2009, 3:12:21 AM
A flower opens,
To the suns warming embrace.
Life awakes again...
Commented Apr 29, 2009, 11:44:12 PM
I'm not sure how you wanted the third line to go, but I always spread a word out, so I got 6 syllables there.
But a good haiku...although it doesn't seem to hit me right.
Wait, I kept reading "awakes" as "awakens" so it's 5.
Commented Apr 30, 2009, 2:52:30 AM
I do hate rating poetry.
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