Determined

VERSE 1:

When he was born,
He was open-minded,
And so bright-eyed.

Told life was good,
Filled with love and beauty,
Well someone lied.

They neglected,
To mention The dark side,
Complicating...

Ev'ry mans life.
Racial slurs and hating,
Penetrating...

Ev'ry damn side.
People judging your moves,
Without a thought.

They hate it when,
You have the happiness,
That they have sought.

CHORUS:

The world's too full of hating,
Lets all just get along...

Ev'ryone enjoys laughing,
And listening to song...

You can't knock me off my horse,
My mind will stay on the line...

You can't make me mis'rable,
I'm determined to be fine.
VERSE 2:
For a while there he almost,
Went out of his mind!

Fear so clouding, and surrounding,
Was all he could find!

Judgement clouding, he stood his ground
And made up his mind!

"No more pessimism, I've had
Enough of your Kind!"

CHORUS:

The world's too full of hating,
Lets all just get along...

Ev'ryone enjoys laughing,
And listening to song...

You can't knock me off my horse,
My mind will stay on the line...

You can't make me mis'rable,
I'm determined to be fine.

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Footnotes
Parts in italics are to be sung by female vocalists, while the rest is to be rapped by a low toned male in an agressive voice. Lines with exclamation marks are to be yelled by a group of male vocalists.

This an unfinished work and will have 5 verses when complete.

Comments

Bambi

Commented Jan 2, 2007, 7:11:54 AM

Great observations and insights. The chorus is really inspirational and motivating. Will look foward to the rest.

Sariel

Commented Jan 3, 2007, 2:21:06 AM

Im not very good at judging rap without the music, but so far so good buddy.

sage_sorceress

Commented Jan 8, 2007, 6:45:16 AM

The lyrics definitly have potential. Is there a hook yet or is it all repetative? i would like to hear it completed someday.

Jake

Commented Jan 12, 2007, 7:25:30 AM

Reminds me of some good ol' 90's rap. Not that that's a bad thing at all. It is hard to judge it, and when I picture you rapping it makes me grin, no offense. I see this jolly red-haired guy with his hat backwards busting some mhad beats, and yeah, it's amusing :P I like it.