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A prose poem by

tripps

Submitted Jun 8, 2008, 3:47:15 PM

AbSeNt

So I sat there and watched myself.I watched me throw any and everything dear to me down the drain.I lay here now back in my bleeding body wondering if I could have stopped myself instead of just being the witness.

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maulanaray Avatar

maulanaray

Commented Dec 5, 2016, 11:45:23 AM
good thought about how to expand baymax word into a poem but it seems forced. Still a cute poem tho :D
Agung Bimo Baskoro Avatar

Agung Bimo Baskoro

Commented Dec 5, 2016, 1:37:11 PM
actually, i have not ever seen BIg Hero Six movie. since i read this poem, i get who Baymax is. hahaaha..
arumgumelar Avatar

arumgumelar

Commented Dec 5, 2016, 2:06:05 PM
I know you push the lines so that it fits BAYMAX word. Still, I get the big picture of this.
Nurwanti Avatar

Nurwanti

Commented Dec 5, 2016, 3:47:41 PM
I like it. Kinds of breakthrough.
how can you come up with such an idea? just curious B)
yuly marina Avatar

yuly marina

Commented Dec 6, 2016, 10:37:23 AM
@yukeyovrinda yah I a gree with @nurwanti How did you get the idea? I am so curious. I think your poem can be the choice to describe Baymax. This is the unique thought.
Yuke Yovrinda Avatar

Yuke Yovrinda

Commented Dec 7, 2016, 4:13:13 AM
@Nurwanti @yuly marina
So happy to hear that, girls. Baymax means something for me. Mine is wearing white clothes. That makes him so cute hehe
Yuke Yovrinda Avatar

Yuke Yovrinda

Commented Dec 7, 2016, 4:34:08 AM
@maulanaray
@arumgumelar
Actually, I want to display a different poem which is rarely used. So, do you think that the first letter capitalized is the best one?
Yuke Yovrinda Avatar

Yuke Yovrinda

Commented Dec 7, 2016, 4:37:58 AM
@Agung Bimo Baskoro
Thanks, Abim. Is there any other comment about the content, maybe?
risuta Avatar

risuta

Commented Dec 7, 2016, 8:00:14 AM
The last line sounds a bit off.
Yuke Yovrinda Avatar

Yuke Yovrinda

Commented Dec 10, 2016, 4:35:29 AM
@risuta
I think so. I looked up my dictionary to take the most appropriate one, but the word which consists of 'x' letter is rarely to found out. Do you have any idea for me to replace the last sentence with what? :)
kt6550 Avatar

kt6550

Commented Feb 11, 2017, 12:00:12 AM
lol Good job.