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Submitted Feb 22, 2011, 11:16:28 PM

A Tru Tale- chapter 4

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In the last chapter(s) mum and Tru went hunting but returned with nothing. Jake was angry and ran into the forest. After Faith went after him Tru fell asleep and dreamt of her sister. She woke up and was captured by Humans.

Chapter 4

On the other side of the forest, a good hour's journey away, Faith searched, oblivious to her daughter's dilemma. She'd been following her mate's scent ever since she left the cabin, tracking him through the trees until she got to the lake. Scowling she realised she'd been here only a few hours earlier with Tru, hunting the deer. Why would he come here? She thought, following the scent to the edge of the lake where it disappeared. Cursing she realised what he had done, he must've waded into the lake and when he got back out his smell was so diluted it was virtually undetectable.

Sighing she sat down, rolling up her torn pants until they were above her knee.

'He doesn't want to be found,' she thought, hissing in air as she stepped into the freezing water. 'So why am I still out here?'

There was no answer, at first at least. Then, after putting a second leg into the water, and wincing again at the temperature, the familiar voice spoke inside her head. "You know exactly why you are here Faith. To look for him."

"But I won't be able to find him," she said aloud, stopping and perching on the bank. "And I know I won't. He...he knows how to hide. He knows how to run." She shook her head from left to right, eyes squeezed shut. "By now he could have left the forest, he could be miles away." A dry laugh escaped her. "He's done it before, why not again?"

For a few seconds Faith was terrified the voice wouldn't produce an answer. But, of course, the voice didn't leave her hanging. "They were different circumstances, then Faith," It whispered. "You know this. Jake would never leave you alone again, not like that anyway. He probably needs some time alone, to think."

Faith opened her eyes. "You think so? So he'll be coming back?"

"Yes just give him some time."

She frowned, "So what should I do now? Go back? Or stay out here, looking for him?"

"I don't know Faith. That's your choice."

Biting her lip she shrugged, pushing herself into the water. "I'll look for him. Not much else I can do anyway."

The water rose up to just below her shoulders and she raised her arms, stumbling on the rocks at the bottom of the lake. She struggled to the nearest bank, crawling onto the dirt. Meticulously, she sniffed at the dirt, trying to pick up his scent but found nothing. Sighing she rolled on her back, leaning back on her hands. 'There's really no use in this. He won't let me find him.'

She stood up and went to the water, splashing in again. This time it wasn't quite as cold and she kept close to the bank and walked past the thick strain of trees.

"What am I going to do about Jake?" Faith asked as she trudged forward. "He still won't look at Tru. And he hasn't gone out hunting ever since..." she sighed deeply. "Well you know."


pirate60 Avatar


Commented Apr 4, 2015, 8:48:19 PM
This is the full version on the second part in the Fate's saga. [part one was 'The Curse Of The Golden Harp, part two, this one, called 'Case Of The Three Fate's, part three called 'Case Of The Added Soul and the epilogue titled 'The Dream'. Hope you enjoy them all]
Darkfire Avatar


Commented Apr 5, 2015, 6:24:04 PM
Loved the dialog! Reading your writing has actually helped me with my own. Thanks and keep em coming.
pirate60 Avatar


Commented Apr 5, 2015, 10:58:14 PM
I'm glad and a bit surprised that it helped you out with your dialogue. I've been reading your work and it seems to me to be on a professional level already. Can't figure out why you're not published already.
Darkfire Avatar


Commented Apr 6, 2015, 4:26:19 AM
I thank you. You are too kind, sir.
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Commented Apr 6, 2015, 4:12:46 PM
"I said ticking thinks off on my hand. " - ticking things off on my hand. Got a couple of sentences like this, Pirate.

As usual, a good take on mythology and fantasy. I enjoyed it. I would break it into two, or maybe even three, parts. There are a lot of places where you could put a break. It would build suspense a bit and not effect the plot at all.
pirate60 Avatar


Commented Apr 6, 2015, 6:45:47 PM
I'll go over it again KT and see if I can spot the others as well. Thanks for the heads up.
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Don Roble

Commented Apr 15, 2015, 9:45:49 AM
This is good but I agree with kt about breaking it up a little.