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A prose poem by


Submitted Oct 11, 2009, 8:52:37 PM

A Touch Never Felt

A touch never felt

How can you ache and crave for someone's touch
When you have never felt it?
I do this for yours, though,
And the yearning grows more each day
I have never wanted anything in my life
As much as I want you
When you whisper such sweet love
In my ear when we talk
You make me melt into a puddle
Of complete helplessness
You have become my every waking thought
And my every dream at night
I breathe in so hard
Trying to catch my breath when we can't talk
I close my eyes so tight
Hoping when I open them you will be there
But I know I have to wait
Until the time is right
It seems so far away
That I think I am losing my mind
I want to breathe in your scent
And keep it with me all day long
I want to taste your love for me
By kissing your sweet lips
I want to feel your body next to me
So when you leave for awhile I can hold on
I just want you to know
That I really do love you
When the day comes and we are together
You will always know and feel this
I will always hug, kiss and love you
Every moment of the day and night
...You will never have another touch unfelt


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Commented Jul 9, 2018, 8:51:14 AM
Welcome, Aqoun. My standard poetry disclaimer: I'm rather old fashioned when it comes to poetry: I actually favor Poe, Marvel, Coleridge, and the Roberts Frost and Service, to give you some idea. To me, even free verse should have a flow and rhythm when read aloud to distinguish it from spoken prose.

Not quite sure what to call this, but it has an interesting theme, at least at the beginning. I got lost toward the end. A few technical items:
Mixing tenses seldom works & didn't here (line 5 is past, rest present).
It seems to be accepted now to omit punctuation in poetry but I find it distracting.
'... stars that ones were...' maybe: once were
There are others on this site who have an appreciation for free-form poetry & they may provide more contemporary comments. Write on.
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Commented Jul 10, 2018, 12:23:22 AM
I like free-form poetry, and this is interesting. However, I am not quite sure where you are going with it.