Rena331 Avatar
A prose poem by


Submitted Oct 21, 2010, 5:12:49 AM

A Poem

As I see rose petals one last time
I close my eyes and heard a chime
As I rest here in a dark place
My past is flowing
At a slow pace
And laying there I ask God, "Why...
Why do we live if we just only die...?"

Yeah...this is kinda the first poem I ever wrote without something to rely on or anything... :D


Don Roble Avatar

Don Roble

Commented Oct 21, 2010, 5:08:48 PM
I close my eyes and heard a chime- two tenses. Try hear instead of heard.
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Commented Oct 22, 2010, 2:16:57 AM
A bit short, but nice.