A Nice, Warm Place

Now I can see it clearly
The path that I took several years ago
It's dark. Cold. Empty.
Unpleasant

But now You save me
Take me to a much better place; your home
So much light. So warm.
I like it here

Thank you, Father.

Comments

Yuke Yovrinda

Commented Dec 4, 2016, 12:43:36 AM

Ya, it is so touching. You are really good to give such an imagination for the reader :)

Palupiskr

Commented Dec 4, 2016, 2:06:33 AM

Thank you very much! I'm still learning tho :)

Galuh Ayu Anggaratri

Commented Dec 4, 2016, 2:22:28 AM

aaaaa that is so meee, unpredictable line in the end, love it!

Palupiskr

Commented Dec 4, 2016, 5:07:49 AM

Took me hours to find the right way to end this tbh. Thanks! @Galuh

stmufarrohah

Commented Dec 4, 2016, 6:12:26 AM

such a beautiful poem. Am I the one who think this are considered spiritual values?

Saw233

Commented Dec 4, 2016, 1:04:18 PM

I don't really get the meaning, is it supposed to be a poem for a stepfather?
But good job with the ending.

Palupiskr

Commented Dec 4, 2016, 3:23:23 PM

@stmufarrohah thank you. and yes, congrats you got the meaning that I want to deliver !

Palupiskr

Commented Dec 4, 2016, 3:28:05 PM

@Saw233 Originally, I wasn't intended to write about something like what you've inferred. What I meant by 'Father' in this poem is the portrayal of the 'God'. But don't worry, everyone is allowed to free their imagination and give the meaning of this poem according to their own imagination, and I really appreciate your own "translation" of this poem, thanks!