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A general fiction story by


Submitted Mar 2, 2009, 7:58:05 PM

A Friendly Encounter

On my way in, I look toward the ground; my tie needs tightening. She was working again. We exchange a smile and I ask for a coffee. Filling up the cup I cannot help looking her up and down, she looks good from the back, too. Handing me the coffee our hands touch and she comments on my smell. It is cocoa butter; I am trying something new I say. She likes it. I think I'll stick with this for a while. I better get a muffin too and I ask for blueberry, "We're all out, but cinnamon is pretty good."


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Scott Bolger

Commented Mar 2, 2009, 10:40:41 PM
This is a good start to something that could be so much more. Try to expand.
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Commented Mar 3, 2009, 1:59:36 AM
I could have a wonderful time with this. Please, please expand and make larger. B)
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Commented Mar 3, 2009, 2:01:43 AM
Yes, agreeing with the two above, make it longer. Also, go through and retype the parts that were messed up during movement from wherever you brought this from.
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Commented Mar 3, 2009, 7:55:05 PM
Ok, I'm gonna try to expand alot and retype it, I'll make it as a new story in a day or 2