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A general fiction story by


Submitted Dec 27, 2009, 1:22:03 PM

A fallen angel

Why must I wait suffer anymore than another?

It's an impossible truth, I have been sitting here forever.

Listening to the clip and clatter of life. This is my

nightmare. living in this solitude is nothing more than

an empty shell of my former glory. Look up to the sun.

I always tell myself. If something so beautiful is my

punishment then I should be able to take it full. I have

been watched from the beginning or what humans would

call the beginning. One thing alludes me though why do

humans seem to think that there is another place.

I have been here forever and have never believed any of

the profits. I could not; not with the knowledge that I

have always had. If there was a god he would have not

left me here to stay in this constant pain. After about a

millennium I stopped trying to kill myself. Nothing can

kill me. But just like everything else I evolve, I grew

stronger, faster, and more beautiful. I guess could call

a fallen angel but that does not accurately state my

being but only make me wish to leave this solitude of

knowledge. Have you ever heard the saying:

With time comes patience, with time comes wisdom, and

with wisdom comes superiority.

Most likely you haven't.I made it up during the time of

Jesus Christ. The first time I saw him it made my time

on earth seem decimal. He instantly knew that I was

not what he would call souls of my father.

He said I was different maybe even a protector of gods

people. Instantly I rejected him. He could never the

understand pain I have felt over this pitiful earth.

Your time will come to understand the truth


Vermithrax Avatar


Commented Nov 22, 2009, 6:45:50 PM
your writing is getting better al the time good buddy;

Good tale, well done. :)
kt6550 Avatar


Commented Nov 23, 2009, 2:11:30 AM
This is good. A nice plot twist. And a bit overdue. :|

Could use just a tad of punctuation and mechanical cleaning.
vrgunslinger Avatar


Commented Nov 26, 2009, 1:54:00 AM
Nice story. I like the beginning, with the rockets hitting the building. Reminded me of Live Free or Die Hard for some reason.
Rob Kosy Avatar

Rob Kosy

Commented Nov 26, 2009, 10:58:40 PM
Fantastic Blue. Absolutely loved the diner scene.
Dialogue was great and totaly in character. This flowed better than any other chapter so far.