A Dark Sunday Night

A Dark Sunday Night

A brave facade I show my friends
    My heart's so very cold
I laugh and joke and smile with them
    Inside is pain untold

They ask of her and with a smile
    It hurts to say her name
I answer that she's doing fine
    And burn inside with shame

Oh how I miss her loving arms
    They tell me that they're glad
Her smell, her kiss, her love and charm
    And they envy what I have

I close my eyes and see her face
    And listen as they leave
My tears fall softly, my smile erased
    I fall to my knees

I miss her Lord and want her now
    You hold her in Your hands
But to Your will my own shall bow
    And trust Your holy plan

-Matthew M. Coiner ©2005

Comments

savage_cushions

Commented Dec 3, 2006, 12:56:48 AM

This is rhythm to dance to !!! Beautiful

afirstcourse

Commented Jan 3, 2007, 7:16:54 PM

It's quite comforting to feel outnumbered in eloquence and virtue when you and your loss are perfectly preserved without ears to hear you and to know no other voice could warm your empty nights.

dark_angel

Commented Jan 18, 2007, 9:15:23 PM

Beautiful rhythm! I also really like how you convey emotion in this poem. You make the reader feel that emotion...and that to me is what poetry is about! Great job!:D

mooshiez

Commented Mar 8, 2007, 8:55:25 PM

I loved it. I can totally relate, though it is over between me and my ex fiance......I've come to realize the difference between love and comfort, and faith and trust....if that makes any sence. All in all, it was beautiful. Cheers!!!

Jareth

Commented May 17, 2007, 12:52:47 PM

It has a really interesting flow, and rhythm. A concept that really shows how people act when they're depressed. With and without company. A topic that makes sense. Touchy topics, though.

EveOfRevolution

Commented May 21, 2007, 5:36:42 PM

this is nice, a little too cliche of a "lost love" poem but it is still a joy to read. i particularly liked the last stanza, that gave the poem its character and its soul. perhaps think about writing with that theme more.

twonite

Commented Nov 8, 2008, 8:15:58 PM

Amazing

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