A dark hole

There is a hole, i pass every day
There is a hole, that screams my name
There is a hole, were nothing can be seen
There is a dark hole,
In this hole i can not be herd,
In this hole i can not be touched,
In this hole nobody can be seen,
In this hole nobody gives a fuck,
There is a hole, were i can not be herd, seen, or touched,
There is a hole, were i long to be so much

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Vermithrax

Commented Jun 27, 2010, 10:02:12 AM

The usual excellence I've come to expect.

Needs a slight clean-up; nothing major.

A good interlude.

Don Roble

Commented Jun 28, 2010, 11:51:51 PM

As Verm said. Your tale reads very easily.

kt6550

Commented Jun 29, 2010, 6:53:51 PM

Nicely done.

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