kt6550 commented on the story titled Storm Caller (work in progress) by Crimson Sky
May 13, 2023, 10:39:58 PM
"Karla, a slightly plump girl with extremely curly hair. " This is an incomplete sentence. You have a few of them in here, you may want to do a good, hard edit and clean them up.
"...white...
kt6550 commented on the poem titled There goes a prey's prey: by Saad El-Asha
May 13, 2023, 10:29:41 PM
You are allowed to post here, including poetry.
kt6550 commented on the poem titled There goes a prey's prey: by Saad El-Asha
May 13, 2023, 10:28:56 PM
A very true observation. It made me think of "The Conqourer Worm," by Poe.
kt6550 commented on the poem titled My late night meets your early morning... by Saad El-Asha
May 13, 2023, 10:25:34 PM
Interesting thought here. A rather different take, following on the heels of "Big Stupid Cow Eyes."
kt6550 commented on the poem titled Big Stupid Cow Eyes by Sol
May 13, 2023, 10:23:05 PM
I don't know if this is poetry, it is very free-form. I would venture to say, however, that someone is in love. :)
kt6550 commented on the poem titled Superhuman by heRi
Nov 30, 2022, 11:30:00 PM
Very good poem here. I really like the timing and pace.
kt6550 commented on the story titled An Old Man's Story by Crimson Sky
Nov 30, 2022, 11:27:30 PM
Well, it is very short. However, it seems as if it begging to make it longer. Why not do so?
You have some mixed tenses in here. You need to clean that up. On the plus, very good imagery.
kt6550 commented on the story titled The God-Killer by Narval971
Nov 10, 2022, 9:47:46 PM
Okay, a few things. You have a good plot here. You could very easily expand and develop this. Nice job.
Now, the issues. You need to format this. It makes it much easier to...
kt6550 commented on the story titled Punk fRidaYs #000301 by rdm88
Nov 10, 2022, 9:27:28 PM
Oh wow. This is really dark and really scary. Nice job.
Now the bad side. You need a bit of formatting on this.
kt6550 commented on the poem titled Atavism by Saad El-Asha
Nov 10, 2022, 9:23:26 PM
Superb. Sadly, I fear, only a dream.
kt6550 commented on the poem titled For All You've Done by CWTilton
Nov 10, 2022, 9:21:45 PM
Perhaps, not so much a poem as a prayer?
Very nice.
kt6550 commented on the story titled Hillshrine by BartTilton
Oct 26, 2022, 9:38:02 PM
"As the enemy captain road away ..." this should be "rode away" You have several examples of this in this posting.
Try some formatting and double-spacing. It is easier to read and easier for...