enigmia commented on the poem titled Blue Ocean by Jack
May 10, 2011, 10:04:39 PM
Well, this is certainly beautiful. Amazing imagery and interesting use of vocabulary. The only critique I might have is that I thought it could use a few more commas.
I thought it was...
enigmia commented on the poem titled Trivial Revelations -- Poem by tjwell01
May 10, 2011, 9:52:44 PM
I don't fully get what's happening here, but I enjoyed going along with the feeling of it all. The imagery, the flow, the rhythm, the vocabulary - all pleasantly captured me, hampered only by the...
enigmia commented on the poem titled TeddyBear Monster by LyraMidnight28
May 10, 2011, 9:35:28 PM
I certainly got that the writer is in pain, but I felt like the lines ebbed and flowed with their descriptiveness, falling somewhat flat at times in a piece that is clearly coming from an emotional...
enigmia commented on the song titled I Hope You Hate Me by wstone1994
May 10, 2011, 10:56:19 AM
I think this is pretty good, and agree with flickeringfairy that without hearing it, some lines seem a bit stuffed for the rhythm presented.
enigmia commented on the song titled Defender of the Faith by wstone1994
May 10, 2011, 10:40:01 AM
I would really enjoy hearing this song. I very much enjoyed reading it.
The only place I got tripped up was in reading the first line. The rhythm fit with the rest for me when I placed a...
enigmia commented on the poem titled Us by LyraMidnight28
May 10, 2011, 10:16:50 AM
I find it a bit awkward to have the first stanza rhyme while the rest does not.
This is a fairly straight to the point piece. Within the coupling, I'm sure I'd be very moved. From an...
enigmia commented on the story titled To My Inner Bad Girl by optimysticynic
May 10, 2011, 10:05:24 AM
This wasn't exactly my cup of tea (just not a fan of the young woman described), but I cannot deny that I found it to be good. I particularly like the narrative being from the narrator to a...
enigmia commented on the story titled Tears From The Sky by deryni
May 10, 2011, 9:53:18 AM
In the second paragraph, the narrator says he knows where the item is, but in the next, he states that he doesn't know where his legs are taking him. As there's no indication in the rest of the...
enigmia commented on the story titled Adam & Eve by Jack
May 10, 2011, 9:30:23 AM
Interesting. I was particularly taken by the use of the snake beneath the tree analogy, given that I thought the creatures now being placed are Adam and Eve. Unless Ra'zuk is prophetic, I am...
enigmia commented on the poem titled To My True Love... by Routh
May 8, 2011, 3:24:31 PM
I really like how simple and true this feels. It emanates more love, in my opinion, than a good deal of the more "flowery" love poetry.
enigmia posted the song titled Float
May 8, 2011, 3:01:06 PM
I float in my mind,
enigmia commented on the poem titled My Heart by Connies Poems
May 8, 2011, 2:55:58 PM
This was nice to give multiple reads to.
The stanza, "The journey of your soul is A breath of fresh air...", though fitting in the flow, threw me a bit in how its meaning fit within the rest...