"Even in literature and art, no man who bothers about originality will ever be original: whereas if you simply try to tell the truth (without caring twopence how often it has been told before) you will, nine times out of ten, become original without ever having noticed it."
-- C.S. Lewis
boneyg
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boneyg posted the story titled The Boy
I'm 46 and have recently decided to go back to school. This is a memoir I had to write for my writing class. I haven't written anything for a very long time so I thought I'd post it here in hopes...
boneyg commented on the poem titled Rythmic Desire by Madhatter
Terrific description and imagery as is par for the course with a Madhatter piece. Sure to elicit a spark of desire in the reader themselves. Very well done.
boneyg commented on the story titled Joe Bob, the Hill and Mosh Henry by Don Roble
He went out to the squad room. “Joe Bob, I give you real credit for bring them in all by yourself. What did they do now?”
"bringing"
Just a few small spelling errors such as that...
"bringing"
Just a few small spelling errors such as that...
boneyg commented on the poem titled Do fish have dreams? by Saad El-Asha
Very nice. I really enjoyed this.
boneyg commented on the story titled Forest of Change: Before-1 by Writestuff852
Some of the wording and sentences did not read quite right but it is nothing that can't be fixed with another read through and edit.
Fantasy is one of my favorite genres when done right and...
Fantasy is one of my favorite genres when done right and...
boneyg commented on the story titled Joe Bob, the Hill and Mosh Henry by Don Roble
This definitely needs a good deal of editing but it is very funny. I found myself literally laughing out loud at some of the dialogue and wording that was used. A very enjoyable read.
boneyg commented on the story titled 2-A Ghost Story by kt6550
It was good way to wind down, an then he would head to bed.
It was (a)good way to wind down, (and) then he would head to bed.
You have such a smooth and relaxing style of writing. I...
It was (a)good way to wind down, (and) then he would head to bed.
You have such a smooth and relaxing style of writing. I...
boneyg commented on the poem titled Hav-A-Tampas by Robert Scott Morris
This has a very endearing message. I understood what you were trying to convey but I had trouble picking up it's rhythm. I neither write nor read much poetry so this could just be an issue with me...
boneyg commented on the poem titled Around these mountains... by Saad El-Asha
I enjoyed this as well. Nicely done.
boneyg commented on the story titled Broken Legacy - The Cursed Blades Swordsman by DSlayer
Kt hit on the problems so I have nothing to add to that. This has promise, you should continue it. Maybe get with someone here that can help you work out the kinks.
boneyg commented on the poem titled Our Little Garage in The Back by Robert Scott Morris
You have done a great job of capturing the small things that impact lives and leave a lasting impression in the memories of friends and loved ones. I really enjoyed this.
boneyg commented on the poem titled Comfortably Dreary by AbsentAuthor
This is very soothing. Nicely done.
Submitted Writings
The Boy
An autobiographical non-fiction story by boneygI'm 46 and have recently decided to go back to school. This is a memoir I had to write for my writing class. I haven't written anything for a very long time so I thought I'd post it here in hopes of getting some feedback. I understand it could have used more detail but unfortunately I was...
Peggys Journal - Entry 2: James Allen Part One
A horror story by boneygThe second entry was a bit long so I decided to break it into two parts, the second part will be posted as soon as it is finished.
Peggys Journal - Entry One: Peggy Swanson
A horror story by boneyga
Tomes Of The Damned Book One - 03 Last Writes
A horror story by boneygAnother short. When a boy and his friend decide to write Katie Underwoods name and number on a bathroom stall, they have no idea the conciquences that await their actions.
Tomes Of The Damned Book One - 02 The Maddening Of Bartholomew Rosema
A horror story by boneygA collection of bazarre tales. Bartholomew Roseman is being watched, by a man in a black coat. Is this man here to warn him, or harm him. That is what Bartholomew plans on finding out.
In My Shoes - 4
A general fiction story by boneygChapter Four - Contains violence and strong language.
In My Shoes - 3
A general fiction story by boneygChapter 3
Tomes Of The Damned Book One - 01 The Flipbook
A horror story by boneygA collection of bizarre shorts.
The Accidental Fart
A haiku poem by boneyg-
Autumn
A haiku poem by boneyg-
Last Of The Forevermen -01
A fantasy story by boneygPrrologue
Oh what might have been
A prose poem by boneygI am not very good at poems, but was bored so I gave it a shot.
