"Have you ever heard the expression 'Walk a mile in my shoes, and then judge me?'. And write your own books."
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Bishur
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Bishur commented on their story titled Giavo
Looks like I need to double space after paragraphs lol... Does it remove indents?
Bishur commented on the story titled Hung-Over by Fiasco Cruz
Fun story! It tended to be a little confusing in some areas where tenses and viewpoints skipped around. I might recommend adding some more comedic elements to lighten it up a bit. The balance of...
Bishur posted the story titled Giavo
VERY rough draft of one of my chapters.
Bishur commented on their story titled The World's Fair
Great advice, thanks!
Bishur commented on their story titled The World's Fair
I'd like to elaborate more on some of the scenery to show the story, instead of just telling it... A little more length and background to the elderly couple might be nice as well...
Bishur posted the story titled The World's Fair
This is an unedited scene from my in-work novel... I decided to pull it out of the book and not use it, but I wanted to know if anyone would think it might be worthy of polishing as a short story?
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Giavo
A fantasy story by BishurVERY rough draft of one of my chapters.
The World's Fair
A fantasy story by BishurThis is an unedited scene from my in-work novel... I decided to pull it out of the book and not use it, but I wanted to know if anyone would think it might be worthy of polishing as a short story?
