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  • Joined: Jun 8, 2007, 9:03:18 PM
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BeckyB commented on the poem titled Passers by by Markdaps
Jul 8, 2007, 8:55:44 PM
I liked the first two lines, evoking a feeling of a drawn-out seasonal romance. Perhaps the contrast in the last line could be another seasonal intrusion (i.e. "autumn" instead of "gray sky")...
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BeckyB commented on the poem titled Just a name by Markdaps
Jul 8, 2007, 8:49:45 PM
I like this--almost like a song. The "Me thinks" is very Shakespearian and sets up an expectation for a more formal and structured poem. "I think" would be more in line with the rest of the words...
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BeckyB commented on the poem titled Fen by Davidude
Jul 1, 2007, 8:49:50 PM
First of all, I love your writing voice. I liked getting inside Fen's head and learning how she views her world. Your descriptions of settings are quite vivid--it's easy to picture the various...
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BeckyB commented on the story titled Timothy by Davidude
Jul 1, 2007, 8:15:42 PM
This was great! I like the techno feel and the juxtaposition of this totally mechanical creation with intense self-awareness and personality hidden within the technology. Great descriptions of...
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BeckyB commented on the story titled Untitled as of yet by laney
Jul 1, 2007, 1:43:27 PM
I like the concept. If you plan on making this a book-length story, then some of the character information can be woven in more subtlely.

I like the hints that Mr. Caroway has traces of...
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BeckyB replied to the discussion titled The Den's Never Ending Story
Jun 8, 2007, 10:59:34 PM
Needless to say, Kirk was "wigged out" by the event. He commanded Spock . . . to come . . . to the bridge . . . to explain the . . . phenomenon. Spock surmised . . .
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