"'One of these days' is none of these days."
-- English Proverb
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astarte commented on the poem titled Grandma's Lullabies by Lonelyhearts1224
Such a heartwarming poem! Well done!
Without being an expert in poetry I think you need to work on the structure of your poem. For example:
"Transgressed the torment that pierced my...
Without being an expert in poetry I think you need to work on the structure of your poem. For example:
"Transgressed the torment that pierced my...
astarte commented on the poem titled The way she loved by aSin
Nice poem. Good job.
These are two things I noticed:
"For no others name would it mention." - other's
"To love is truly be killed." - "To love is to truly be killed."
These are two things I noticed:
"For no others name would it mention." - other's
"To love is truly be killed." - "To love is to truly be killed."
astarte commented on the poem titled The Rat And The Cat by pirate60
I really enjoyed reading it, pirate! Well done!
astarte commented on the article titled How It Feels by bhavnabkumar
There are a few grammatical and punctuation mistakes in your essay. I'm sure you'll find them if you read it again carefully. These are a few examples:
"In this age of open letters...
"In this age of open letters...
astarte commented on the poem titled Deep Within by Shawldancer24
A few of the mistakes I noticed:
"until the broke into a bunch of splinters and slivers." - It should be "until they broke..."
"she grew so tall facing each years passing...
"until the broke into a bunch of splinters and slivers." - It should be "until they broke..."
"she grew so tall facing each years passing...
astarte commented on the poem titled Giving up by SirSludge
"It burns with stability, my soulles fuel." - Here I think what you wanted to say is "my soul's fuel."
Good job. As the title says it is about giving up and I liked the way you portrayed the...
Good job. As the title says it is about giving up and I liked the way you portrayed the...
astarte commented on the story titled I'm new and would like some feed back by Roger Wordcraft
As Don said you have to fix those errors but other than that it's a very good. Well done.
astarte commented on the story titled Energy - Prologue by Nexeus
This is an interesting start to your story, Nex. There are a couple of minor spelling mistakes that you'll notice if you read it carefully like "Feer flooded Aelian..." instead of fear or "Septis...
astarte commented on the story titled A mind's play by LTheRed
It could work as a prologue to a story, indeed, and I would like to see what you can do with it. I have to say, though, that I liked it as it is and I think it can stand alone just fine.
astarte commented on the story titled Esther by golden_monarch
Interesting. I'm looking forward to see where you'll go with it.
astarte commented on the story titled Ancestor - Prologue by Nexeus
A very good introduction to your story, Nex. I'm moving on to the next chapter.
astarte commented on the poem titled I want you so bad by Blood_Black_Rose
I think I've read this before but didn't realize it until I was halfway through it. Nice job!
