There goes a prey's prey:

Poem written by Saad El-Asha on Wednesday 22, March %2

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There goes a prey's prey: a hunter in disguise. Predators live with no disguise, as they exercise virtue 1 in the broad daylight, and disappear into the narrow night. That is not to say there is virtue 2 in disguise: The prey is one.
   

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  • asevenson
    First, I'm not an avid poetry reader. Thanks for your submission, I'm not sure I even could post a poem as I'm brand new here. The idea of the first line prey's prey made me think of something like an insect. Bottom of food chain right? And while they can be hunters; I struggled with what that might mean. I also found the numerals (are they line numbers?) distracting. The final line using one leaves me asking one what? Again, I appreciate your effort.
    - March 31 2023 03:02:11
    • kt6550
      You are allowed to post here, including poetry.
      - May 13 2023 23:29:41
    • Saad El-Asha
      Your questions somehow validate the poem, o Seventh Son! Smile
      - April 23 2023 01:53:01
      • kt6550
        A very true observation. It made me think of "The Conqourer Worm," by Poe.
        - May 13 2023 23:28:56