Poem written by heRi on Tuesday 29, November %22

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I am coming with second poem of mine, all your suggestions will be kindly appreciated.

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Once again in a vicious cycle of mine, wondering If this moment ever passes by, falling Down through insanity do I, asking Myself as another day comes by. Will I witness the glorious days of Utopia? Oh, you mighty One who greatest powers possess. Relentlessly bearing the burden of your biggity bullocks. Madly I scream out and confess. Yes! I am the “sinner” who in curious manner questions. Will I witness the glorious days of Utopia? After all, the blurry veil is lifted. Finally found myself in clarity, and whole my world shifted. Reality turns real, I am gifted. Raising myself above mortals, embracing my own faith. Thus Spoke Zarathustra!

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  • Very good poem here. I really like the timing and pace.
    - November 30 2022 23:30:00