When first I was told I had become a man...

Poem written by Saad El-Asha on Saturday 13, November %10

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Overall Rating: 76.8%

This writing has been rated by 2 members, resulting in a rating of 76.8% overall. Below is a breakdown of these results:

Concept/Plot:64.5%
Imagery:65.5%
Spelling & Grammar:92%
Flow/Rhythm:94%
Vocabulary:68%
When first I was told I had become a man, I was both happy and sad. I was happy that I would no longer run errands. I was sad that baths with my mum no longer existed. When she told me I should keep my undergarment on, I knew I had grown hairy and physical. Thirty years later, as I welcome my death, I recall when she used to ask what I’d learnt in school, Not taking heed of nudity and soap. We would gossip and celebrate health, As the water changed mood, from hot to cold, From cold to hot.
   

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  • I find this quite lovely. It really brings back some memories for me. Very good!
    - December 11 2021 21:17:23
    • Thanks, buddy.
      - December 12 2021 12:59:30
      • Really nice I like it
        - May 02 2022 14:22:29