Great men do not run...

Poem written by Saad El-Asha on Friday 5, February 2021

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Overall Rating: 84%

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Great men do not run. We see them standing, on camera and in real life, Giving speeches and resolving conflicts. They walk. Then night fell slowly, As I saw my grandfather running for water, As the barn caught fire. A silhouette in panic at night, Betrays a running chieftain by the fire light, And fire is there to sing.
   

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    #1

    MythbhavdMythbhavd

    The conflict between perception and reality was elegantly painted. I am curious. Of what is the fire singing? His bravery? His cowardice? The betrayal of the heart of the observer. It's not needed in the poem itself, but it left a space to think. Well written.
    Commented 08/02/2021 03:00
    #2

    Saad El-AshaSaad El-Asha

    Thank you, Myth.
    I believe it only sings the scene as it is. No value added.
    Commented 11/02/2021 23:22
    #3

    kt6550kt6550

    Superb poem. However, he ran for water. He was brave, and he did run. His actions contradict the title.
    Was that the intent?
    Commented 14/02/2021 20:43
    #4

    Saad El-AshaSaad El-Asha

    I think my intention was to investigate the falsehood of behaviour in some "great men".
    Commented 16/02/2021 09:38