One mans experience

Roleplay written by Cos99 on Friday 22, January 2021

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Just an observation of a man

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Samuel Brain appreciates the oddities of life. He often thought plant earth is a very bizarre place indeed. All the mystery and absurdity of life baffled and bemused him. A curious fellow he was. Sam often marvelled at the wonders of life. Overall it was not from a place of despair, more from a place of genuine curiosity of how life pans out. It was bemusing and perplexing to acknowledge the changes in daily living in the last 10 years. The real sense of optimism in the early years of the decade had been replaced by bewilderment at how things had panned out. Samuel personally tried significantly to not let the changes in reality be the end of his light. Sure , there was much head scratching and pondering , but then he would acknowledge that the only really constant thing in life is change. I think and believe due to this realisation by Samuel it helped him In the developing of a sense of humour and using the power of his heart. Samuel is exceptionally praising of the people in his life who have provided unconditional and pure love for him despite all his absurdities and eccentricities that came to the fore for a while, but have now soften through focused guidance, love, and absolute kindness. Samuel has encounter strange episodes in his thinking and believe it was meant to be. Brain loves the strong positive forces in the world and is adamant that they never fully extinguish. The 'untouchables' have taken a battering in recent times and he wishes and hopes they will be given more love when they need it most. Furthermore, Brain in recent times has enhanced his understanding that the digital age leaves a lot less things with the ability to be sacred. So, I say goodbye, av revoir , ciao, may we meet again, until next time, good day, all the best, lights out,
   

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    Hey Cos,

    This looks like an unfinished first draft and it may well be. I like the concept that you're developing, but there is a lot of revision work that needed. There are some grammar errors that need to be addressed issues with the flow of your writing. The ending looks incomplete.

    I'll give you an example. The last sentence of the third paragraph looks like you're starting a new thought, but it's never expanded. The final sentence of the work is incomplete and left hanging with a comma. Twice you used "panned out." Perhaps a synonym could have been used for one.

    Those are just a few thoughts toward a revision.
    Okay, here we go.

    Mythbhavd pretty much hit the nail on the head. Here is an example:

    "Samuel is exceptionally praising of the people in his life who have provided unconditional and pure love for him despite all his absurdities and eccentricities that came to the fore for a while, but have now soften through focused guidance, love, and absolute kindness. "

    This is one long rambling sentence. Since it is also a paragraph, you should break it up into three or four sentences. Express the idea that way. It makes for an easier read, and allows you to expand the idea if you choose to do so.