Everyday

Poem written by onix on Friday 17, April 2020

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just a (what i think is) a poem i thought off

Overall Rating: 98.8%

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I wait patiently, everyday. I stay up late at night, no answer. I hold in the anger,the rage, the hate. I speak but no one listens. I laugh but no one understands. I look upon the view, people walk on by. I stand upon the view, suddenly they care.
   

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    #1

    dickensonfandickensonfan

    That was so perfect! Simple, rhythmic, a terrific contrasting of the two sides of human nature. Something everyone can easily relate to. I like the way it starts with the passive--wait, stay up, hold in--building the pressure. Then it breaks forth to the active--speak, laugh, look. Then the trespass occurs and finally a reaction. Who hasn't had the same aggravating sense of being unfairly ignored only to be faulted for interrupting.
    Commented 17/04/2020 13:25
    #2

    IndecentAccidentIndecentAccident

    I love this too. The last line is especially impactful and perfectly sums up the message you're sending, as well as your word choice capturing the emotions being felt. Well written.
    Commented 18/04/2020 13:23
    #3

    kt6550kt6550

    Kind of fun. Nice job. Cool
    Commented 23/04/2020 22:44