Their Rejection

Poem written by Zo on Thursday 9, April 2020

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An amateur poem about rejecting someone’s confession.

Overall Rating: 97.2%

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Upon this rock Where we live Spring comes again And I lay Shrouded in warmth Hoping we will still be friends I’m sorry for my loveless self I refused to take your hand Unknowing of how I felt I desired your warmth, not your love, But led you to believe I returned it A guilt I won’t be free of Now I lay alone in my loneliness Wishing I wasn’t so cold.
   

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    #1

    dickensonfandickensonfan

    Kindness or loneliness misinterpreted as romantic love is certainly no grounds for guilt. Nor can it be called an intentional deception. But one feels what one feels. Your poem does a good job of conveying the regret and guilt and sadness for loss of a friend who wanted to see only one part of you and missed all the rest.
    Commented 09/04/2020 13:34
    #2

    ZoZo

    Thank you dickensonfan. I know it’s not my fault, but I can’t help but feel like the bad guy, especially when in media the one rejecting someone is always painted as the villain. I would always hate those characters without even realizing how hard it actually is to reject someone.
    Commented 09/04/2020 21:06
    #3

    kt6550kt6550

    Ah, this is sad. Nice emotional imagery here.
    Commented 10/04/2020 22:52
    #4

    IndecentAccidentIndecentAccident

    I love the contrast between the warmth and emotional coldness being felt, great choice of words to get across those emotions too. I can definitely relate.
    Commented 16/04/2020 20:56