Opposing Forces

Poem written by Lonelyhearts1224 on Friday 18, January 2019

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A free verse poem

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Two defiant opposing forces, that what we've become you and I I strive to lead a tranquil life, you soar sky high amidst the black of night Like adversaries in a game of wits and tug of war arguing each time we pass each other by The all knowing Creator is letting us know We heading down a destructive dead end path With vicious words or innuendoes, a mother and her lovely daughter should never verbally fret To scorn you, wasn't my intention Degrading you wasn't what I planned We'll need restraint and a combined effort If we are ever to reverse life's earthshaking perks Our blood is one, my love for you is endless.. Let no one tear this God made unity that's blessed I'm not Cersei or you "The Mother Of Dragons," foes at war for the Seven Kingdoms, on the famously acclaimed hit series, 'Game Of Thrones' We aren't even two nominated actresses dead-locked for the same Oscar, or aspiring to win someday, A Golden Globe Award I only wish for your felicity and salubrity not your mischance or desolation like they have steered you to believe If one day death unpredictably decides to come knocking and it must right then and there choose rightfully between you or me Allow me then, to show my love and claim the tragic ticket Let my doomed fortune scrape our transgressions clean A dedicated mom is love, self-sacrifice and a continuous struggle Someday, you too this concept will embrace and finally come to comprehend Nothing on earth or in all the heavens Can ever lessen a mother's love for her birth children Be they wicked born or Angel sent The words , I spew are not meant to cut in deeply, induce more pain to fractured bones so they never heal or are spoken out of spite to inflict and sustain an incessant bleeding on They are lessons learned, that as a mom I want to take the time and share with you the way my mother took the time and shared with me, once These are spilled out hoping to discourage grave missteps, share enlightenment, pleas that beckon you to wait, Just take a pause, and really think Decisions made in hast carry a hefty burden and aren't so easy, later to make amends for or radically delete In a not so distant future you'll have to learn to live with choices you now presently have made But it will be life, then after so long who will come to finally collect the overdue payment for that near forgotten debt Then, deeply immersed in anguish you'll have to seriously face yourself and state, "If I only then had taken time, to pause, reflect and listen, before I carried out this dreadful life-altering mistake." written on: July 22, 2017
   

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    So, Lonely, this is pretty much in character with what you (and other misguided ones) call free verse -- a term which is an oxymoron since "verse" implies form and pattern while "free" means the opposite. Kind of like saying "bright black" or "soft cacophony." Aloud most of it reads smoothly (the only characteristic possibly distinguishing "free verse" from "prose" ) although the commercial trailer for 'Game Of Thrones' in the middle seems out of place. There are a few spots where it's a little rough, but I guess that's part of the freedom.
    ... wasn't what I planed {"planned"}
    ... fortune scrap our transgressions clean {"scrape" maybe?}
    ... presently have made {"presently" properly means "soon" not "now" although this misuse is on almost every list of common errors in English so you'll only have complaints if you run into a nitpicker and I'm sure you don't know anyone like that -- right?}
    "If I'd only then had taken time, to pause, reflect and listen, {"I'd" = "I had" so one "had" too many; don't forget the "Oxford comma" after "reflect"}
    Wishing you two an armistice or at least a cease fire. Write on.
    A great deal of sadness comes through here. Seems there is pain on both sides, and a great deal of pain and very little understanding.