Summers day

Poem written by Cupofsoup on Saturday 15, September 2018

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A question

Overall Rating: 79.2%

This writing has been rated by 1 members, resulting in a rating of 79.2% overall. Below is a breakdown of these results:

Concept/Plot:65%
Imagery:75%
Spelling & Grammar:91%
Flow/Rhythm:85%
Vocabulary:80%
More beautiful than a summer's day More precious than winter's cold More special than I can say More valuable than finest gold eyes that pierce so beautiful as she stands remove all fears as she understands With a love so real Can this all be true Her heart to steal What can I do Except ask, would you?
   

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    Cup, my standard poetry disclaimer: I'm rather old fashioned when it comes to poetry: I actually favor Poe, Marvel, Coleridge, Wilde, and the Roberts Frost and Service, to give you some idea. To me, even free verse should have a flow and rhythm when read aloud to distinguish it from spoken prose. When reading a poem, you should almost hear the music that would make it a song. It's usually not a good sign when there's a grammatical error in the title (Summer's); however, that was corrected in the poem itself. That said, the first and third verse flowed well but the second was a little rough out loud. Also, it seemed like more fluff than meat, and I'm a carnivore. The right-justification is a little off-putting to no purpose, but this wasn't long enough for that to be a real distraction. I would say 2/3 of a good poem on a mediocre subject.
    This poem really lets me see into your heart for this girl. You must really love her. Beautiful poem. Even the right-handed justification doesn't put me off at all. It goes with the theme of just how special and unique she is
    Beautiful.
    Question: Why did you right-justify it?