Determined

Rap written by Routh on Sunday 31, December 2006

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Undeterred by the dark side of life...

Overall Rating: 93.333333333333%

This writing has been rated by 3 members, resulting in a rating of 93.333333333333% overall. Below is a breakdown of these results:

Concept/Plot:92.333333333333%
Imagery:91.666666666667%
Spelling & Grammar:96.666666666667%
Flow/Rhythm:93.333333333333%
Vocabulary:92.666666666667%
VERSE 1: When he was born, He was open-minded, And so bright-eyed. Told life was good, Filled with love and beauty, Well someone lied. They neglected, To mention The dark side, Complicating... Ev'ry mans life. Racial slurs and hating, Penetrating... Ev'ry damn side. People judging your moves, Without a thought. They hate it when, You have the happiness, That they have sought. CHORUS: The world's too full of hating, Lets all just get along... Ev'ryone enjoys laughing, And listening to song... You can't knock me off my horse, My mind will stay on the line... You can't make me mis'rable, I'm determined to be fine. VERSE 2: For a while there he almost, Went out of his mind! Fear so clouding, and surrounding, Was all he could find! Judgement clouding, he stood his ground And made up his mind! "No more pessimism, I've had Enough of your Kind!" CHORUS: The world's too full of hating, Lets all just get along... Ev'ryone enjoys laughing, And listening to song... You can't knock me off my horse, My mind will stay on the line... You can't make me mis'rable, I'm determined to be fine.
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Footnotes Parts in italics are to be sung by female vocalists, while the rest is to be rapped by a low toned male in an agressive voice. Lines with exclamation marks are to be yelled by a group of male vocalists. This an unfinished work and will have 5 verses when complete.
   

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    Great observations and insights. The chorus is really inspirational and motivating. Will look foward to the rest.
    Im not very good at judging rap without the music, but so far so good buddy.
    The lyrics definitly have potential. Is there a hook yet or is it all repetative? i would like to hear it completed someday.
    Reminds me of some good ol' 90's rap. Not that that's a bad thing at all. It is hard to judge it, and when I picture you rapping it makes me grin, no offense. I see this jolly red-haired guy with his hat backwards busting some mhad beats, and yeah, it's amusing Pfft I like it.
    Wow... I really need to finish this :p
    Rap listeners in Canada? Shock AHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!
    lol, I think you should record it and post it on the site!
    Yepper, you do need to finish it.