Determined

Rap written by Routh on Sunday 31, December %3

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Undeterred by the dark side of life...

Overall Rating: 93.333333333333%

This writing has been rated by 3 members, resulting in a rating of 93.333333333333% overall. Below is a breakdown of these results:

Concept/Plot:92.333333333333%
Imagery:91.666666666667%
Spelling & Grammar:96.666666666667%
Flow/Rhythm:93.333333333333%
Vocabulary:92.666666666667%
VERSE 1: When he was born, He was open-minded, And so bright-eyed. Told life was good, Filled with love and beauty, Well someone lied. They neglected, To mention The dark side, Complicating... Ev'ry mans life. Racial slurs and hating, Penetrating... Ev'ry damn side. People judging your moves, Without a thought. They hate it when, You have the happiness, That they have sought. CHORUS: The world's too full of hating, Lets all just get along... Ev'ryone enjoys laughing, And listening to song... You can't knock me off my horse, My mind will stay on the line... You can't make me mis'rable, I'm determined to be fine. VERSE 2: For a while there he almost, Went out of his mind! Fear so clouding, and surrounding, Was all he could find! Judgement clouding, he stood his ground And made up his mind! "No more pessimism, I've had Enough of your Kind!" CHORUS: The world's too full of hating, Lets all just get along... Ev'ryone enjoys laughing, And listening to song... You can't knock me off my horse, My mind will stay on the line... You can't make me mis'rable, I'm determined to be fine.
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Footnotes Parts in italics are to be sung by female vocalists, while the rest is to be rapped by a low toned male in an agressive voice. Lines with exclamation marks are to be yelled by a group of male vocalists. This an unfinished work and will have 5 verses when complete.
   

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  • Bambi
    Great observations and insights. The chorus is really inspirational and motivating. Will look foward to the rest.
    - January 02 2007 07:11:54
    • Sariel
      Im not very good at judging rap without the music, but so far so good buddy.
      - January 03 2007 02:21:06
      • sage_sorceress
        The lyrics definitly have potential. Is there a hook yet or is it all repetative? i would like to hear it completed someday.
        - January 08 2007 06:45:16
        • Jake
          Reminds me of some good ol' 90's rap. Not that that's a bad thing at all. It is hard to judge it, and when I picture you rapping it makes me grin, no offense. I see this jolly red-haired guy with his hat backwards busting some mhad beats, and yeah, it's amusing Pfft I like it.
          - January 12 2007 07:25:30
          • Routh
            Wow... I really need to finish this :p
            - April 08 2008 12:37:45
            • kennydarko82
              Rap listeners in Canada? Shock AHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!
              - January 15 2009 02:27:54
              • Connor Merrifield
                lol, I think you should record it and post it on the site!
                - February 16 2009 21:32:25
                • kt6550
                  Yepper, you do need to finish it.
                  - March 09 2011 21:10:39