Determined

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Undeterred by the dark side of life...This writing has been rated by 3 members, resulting in a rating of 93.333333333333% overall. Below is a breakdown of these results: | |
Concept/Plot: | 92.333333333333% |
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VERSE 1:
When he was born,
He was open-minded,
And so bright-eyed.
Told life was good,
Filled with love and beauty,
Well someone lied.
They neglected,
To mention The dark side,
Complicating...
Ev'ry mans life.
Racial slurs and hating,
Penetrating...
Ev'ry damn side.
People judging your moves,
Without a thought.
They hate it when,
You have the happiness,
That they have sought.
CHORUS:
The world's too full of hating,
Lets all just get along...
Ev'ryone enjoys laughing,
And listening to song...
You can't knock me off my horse,
My mind will stay on the line...
You can't make me mis'rable,
I'm determined to be fine.
VERSE 2:
For a while there he almost,
Went out of his mind!
Fear so clouding, and surrounding,
Was all he could find!
Judgement clouding, he stood his ground
And made up his mind!
"No more pessimism, I've had
Enough of your Kind!"
CHORUS:
The world's too full of hating,
Lets all just get along...
Ev'ryone enjoys laughing,
And listening to song...
You can't knock me off my horse,
My mind will stay on the line...
You can't make me mis'rable,
I'm determined to be fine.
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Footnotes
Parts in italics are to be sung by female vocalists, while the rest is to be rapped by a low toned male in an agressive voice. Lines with exclamation marks are to be yelled by a group of male vocalists.
This an unfinished work and will have 5 verses when complete.
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