Arrogantly

Poem written by Nurwanti on Monday 5, December 2016

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A short poem about arrogance

Overall Rating: 97.7%

This writing has been rated by 2 members, resulting in a rating of 97.7% overall. Below is a breakdown of these results:

Concept/Plot:100%
Imagery:100%
Spelling & Grammar:92.5%
Flow/Rhythm:98%
Vocabulary:98%
Shortly, For the sake of beauty, I brush blush patiently For the head of glory, I slander others secretly For the emblem of religiosity, I questioned the fidelity And I just don't get it rightly, When people shout at me I just took it wrongly, Blaming the reality, For the end of remedy Shortly, That's all me, Till I cried silently
   

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    #1

    ShaneShane

    I really like how you give a matching rhythm through the suffix -ly here,
    Nice work there!
    Commented 05/12/2016 01:06
    #2

    stmufarrohahstmufarrohah

    nice for the rhythm!
    Commented 05/12/2016 01:55
    #3

    NurwantiNurwanti

    Well thanks @Shane

    I'm glad the results are satisfactory, it took quite a lot of time to put the right rhymes.
    What do u think about the content?
    Commented 05/12/2016 06:55
    #4

    NurwantiNurwanti

    @stmuffarrohah
    Thanks. Anyway, what do u think about the diction? Any issues?
    Commented 05/12/2016 07:00
    #5

    ShaneShane

    You don't need to be so overly dependent on rhyme, @nurwanti

    Commented 05/12/2016 14:41
    #6

    NurwantiNurwanti

    do you think so @shane
    ?
    well, later when I write others poetry maybe I was not so much emphasis on the rhyme.
    Commented 05/12/2016 16:02
    #7

    YuanputraYuanputra

    so deep. i sure it's awesome. but
    what do you mean about religiosity.? Hehhe
    @nurwanti

    Commented 09/12/2016 18:39
    #8

    NurwantiNurwanti

    Thanks @yuanputra. I'm glad you like it.
    Anyway, the meaning is sentimentally religious.
    Commented 20/12/2016 12:19