I'm Sory, Thank You

Poem written by arumgumelar on Sunday 4, December %17

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Is 'thank you' enough?

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Thank you, I know, is not sufficient But thank you For loving me more than I love myself For taking care of me when no one else does You gave it all Wanted nothing in return I wasted all Left nothing but wound I'm sorry, I know, not sufficient But sorry For wasting your time For being your biggest disappointment
   

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  • I like the second stanza and I think it already represents the title.

    You gave it all
    Wanted nothing in return
    it is for "Thank You"

    I wasted all
    Left nothing but wound
    it is for "I'm Sorry"

    For the rest, I can't say I like the sound of it. Just my opinion. But, nice try.
    - December 05 2016 17:04:39
    • Very nice.
      - December 08 2016 00:53:44
      • Sorry I can't find any good diction to fill in the poem and make it better. However, I appreciate your suggestion. Thank you
        - December 10 2016 14:52:43