Lost
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It was at 2 am,
when a girl started to sing her lullaby
and the wall became an actual sanity.
"Please," she whispered,
"comeback", she waited for a while
and stopped singing.
She asked for friend who died two years ago.
Near the window,
she sat on the chair,
while seeing the snow fell down.
That girl with a quill,
started to write her friend a letter:
“Dear self,
I had a dream,
I saw you dressed fine,
you look so beautiful
with all the smiles over him.
That made my heart throb.
Then,
It was all of sudden,
when the weather too bad,
and the storm came to take him out,
and you just being trapped,
in the defenseless.
Blank.
At the end,
you smiled over me, finally.
You said that it was fine,
but your eyes filled with all the pain.
“Welcome back, Dear” I said.
And that word never had its meaning,
cause I know you was taken along with all the thunder."
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She looked around,
ended her writing.
At the crack of the dawn, she sighed:
"Okay. I lose you for the second time."
@stmufarrohah
wanted to try to write this kind of poetry
That's right.
I'm trying to write a narrative poetry that's why there are characters also voices of narrator.
Besides, I didn't follow the rhymes.
I chose dramatic ending for this.
This could be imperfect, but hope you'll enjoy it
First, Thankyou for your respond
Yes, as I said before I tried to write a kind of narrative poetry although far from perfect.
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As I read, narrative poetry gives a verbal representation which is told by the narrator in the text. Simply known as “story poem”, it has a beginning, middle, and the entire story is usually written in metered verse.
There is a strong sense characters and plot.
Narrative poetry has some sub-categories: Epics, The mock-epic, and A ballad.
AND YES you should try to write this kind of poetry, Good luck!
Yeah, I tried to visualize how a girl lost herself because of another person.
Nowadays people put other self first instead of his/herself.
Why I used female as the object?
Because I experienced by listening my friends' stories.
I was speechless knowing such sadness facts like this.