What was it about her?

Poem written by aSin on Wednesday 10, August 2016

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Everyone falls for someone... but is it true affection.. or lust?

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What was it about her? A question she asked herself everyday. What was it about her heart that made it so easy for them to stay? What was it about her smile that made them all stop and stare? What was it about her laugh that made them throw caution to the air? What was it about her lips that made them want to her even more? What was it about her mind that made her something to adore? What was it about her body that made them want to have her around? What was it about her eyes that in them is where they wanted to drown? What was it about her love that made them care for her oh so dear? What was it about her voice that made them stop in their tracks to hear? What was it about her being that appealed to so many at a time? What was it about all of these things yet not one could she call 'mine'? What was it about her sadness the thing she hid so well, That even with all her admirer's not one of them could tell. What was it about her soul that made them all want to have her? That even with all these enthusiast, true love had yet to find her.
   

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    Very nicely done. An excellent ending.

    It is well-written and is paced very well.

    Good writing.
    Very good piece. Nothing felt rushed or forced. Everything flowed very naturally to the next point. The realities of infatuation vs love are very true. Especially for a young woman who has many admirers but no partner. I like how she is asking herself the question. It lends itself to think that even with all those qualities, is she still not good enough to find her true love. This is simple, yet multi-faceted.

    Well done.
    Ah! Another eternal question! Smile
    Love this. It seems to hint that she may have low self esteem, wondering how people could be interested in her. Coupled with wondering why no-one seems to want anything beyond a one night stand or casually dating. The repetition of questions really makes your writing flow.
    Thank you all for the positive feedback Smile