Sometimes...

Prose written by Demonic on Monday 8, August 2016

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Because the emptiness is back...

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Most of the time, I'm happy, and I walk around the town with a grin the size of Cheshire Cat's. I say "hello," to the people around me, I wave to the people I know and have fun at work. I laugh with my sister and I pig out while watching our favourite shows on Netflix. I joke with my friends and enjoy my time outside in the sun. My music blares in my ears and I silently sing along to old songs I used to belt out in my bedroom. Sometimes I'm sad. I cry when no one is watching, and wipe my tears on the closest thing I can grab; from a tissue to my shirt. I walk around town with my head tucked into my chest. I avoid people and try my best to put on a brave face at work. I smile when necessary, but it's nothing but a mask; an illusion. I bury myself in books and keep myself away from anything emotional. If I cry, at least I have a book to blame it on. Sometimes I'm empty. I feel like something is missing; someone is missing. I keep thinking that I will see you walk passed my bedroom door. That I'll turn the corner and you'll be there watching TV. I keep imagining that you being gone is just a dream; that it's not really this quiet... But it is. And I have been empty for 295 days. I keep thinking that I will wake up and not feel the concave in my chest that has slowly been growing. I thought time was supposed to heal everything; when in reality, it just makes it easier to breathe. So, another night passes by, and tears have, once again, stained the lenses of my glasses. I try to sleep with the images of the moments we shared together. I try to sleep while my heart, mind and soul misses you.
   

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    Alright, so I really enjoyed your work. It's obvious you put some real emotion into this, and it transfers well. However, I was somewhat surprised when the character 'you' (dont know how better to say it sorry xD) was introduced rather late in the story? I feel maybe that should be a bit earlier. But on the whole, I loved your colloquial imagery, and how your style ranged from down-to-earth to downright poetic to suit the emotion you were expressing. Well done! ^3^
    Well done. It's filled with emotion and is very expressive. I also like the slightly repetitive structure... "Most of the time... sometimes", "walk around town" etc.

    I wouldn't have thought it on my own, but after reading Jay's comments, I agree... introducing the 'you' character earlier would be nice... perhaps something about sharing happiness and sharing sadness together?

    Well done
    G
    You need to do some minor editing here.

    Other than that, an interesting observation. Time does not heal all wounds, it only blunts the pain.