Fire In The Rain

Sonnet written by pirate60 on Monday 25, April %20

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I entered this in a contest. Requirements were that it use one of the four elements of old and that it be in Sonnet form.

Overall Rating: 88.2%

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Concept/Plot:86%
Imagery:65%
Spelling & Grammar:100%
Flow/Rhythm:91%
Vocabulary:99%
Fire In The Rain Flickering torch upon windowsill In turbulent air whirls the windmill Red heats the beads of mornings kiss Electrified volt of Terra’s abyss Illuminating glass separates the elements Neither shall embrace in remembrance. Ticks of time resonate the patter of drops Heard as I gaze past the swaying treetops Everlasting Earth, water, air and fire Reclaiming each realm and to each their desire. Aimlessly I ponder by candlelight Inner most thoughts ends this quiet spring night Now I blow out my candles flame…and smile.
   

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  • "Inner most thoughts ends this quite spring night" - quiet spring night?

    This is really good. You did a great job staying within the requirements of the contest. Good job, pirate. I hope you win!
    - April 25 2016 21:32:42
    • Good catch KT thanks. I totally missed that.
      - April 26 2016 12:57:27
      • Lovely. I hope you win!
        - May 27 2016 02:03:09
        • I didn't win. There were a lot of very good sonnets in this contest. Still I feel this was a good entry.
          - May 27 2016 10:46:17