For the Cats

Sonnet written by erratum on Wednesday 3, June %1

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In memorium: Francis

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For my departed pet, Francis Rest in Peace This day the third has gone, congealed like peas. Mother readies the small grocery bag: The dying kitten coughs its final wheeze, I exit the house & light another fag. Death has plagued this litter, and the world, too. We"re scarcely born than the struggle begins To nurture those or what stand in death"s queue. Mortality may result from immortal sins, But I"m no cleric and loss occasion For rabid lectures from a fired pulpit; Nor do I welcome secular equation On matters dear to the human spirit. This morning we have lost another one. I pray t"morrow death"s foul spell is gone.
   

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  • This touches me. It is beautifully written and presented. Also, I am a cat lover.
    - June 04 2015 16:08:16
    • This day the third has gone, congealed like peas.- congealed like peas?

      The feelings are good.
      - June 11 2015 08:34:50