The cost of love

Poem written by Blood_Black_Rose on Saturday 28, February %10

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How I would see love, if I believed it was real

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When one heart seeks another it cannot hide. Wanting, needing, longing for its partner. When two hearts collide the feelings cannot be denied. Two beat as one and the one beats for it's other. Nothing feels like the pounding joy of love. True love cannot be bought, taken, stolen or prevented. One cannot pick and choose who they fall for. But some love is unhealthy and relentless. Leaving you unhappy and angry but wanting more. One day after searching you will find your other half. When you find your one true love, nothing will rip you apart. Love will spread within you and make your soul fly. Love with hit you with a shockingly wonderful blow like a dart. Making you feel warm and fuzzy and wanting to die. But without your other half you are cold and empty. Finding love is the hardest and longest journey you'll ever make. But once you are with them, nothing else matters. You have to be careful of the haters and the people who are fake. Find the one which stops time for you and makes your heart flutter. Then you will know the true meaning of love.
   

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  • Very good. A really nice romantic poem. Well done.
    - March 02 2015 19:26:57
    • 'When two hearts collide the feelings cannot be denied.'

      I really like this line. Sums up everything nicely in my mind. Well written.
      - March 09 2015 01:21:00