A Girl With As Many Razorblades As You Shouldn't Have A Problem Getti

Riddle written by truthserum887 on Thursday 26, October %3

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the title is the best part

Overall Rating: 84.633333333333%

This writing has been rated by 6 members, resulting in a rating of 84.633333333333% overall. Below is a breakdown of these results:

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Girl you want filth And I've got plenty of dirt on you The alcohol can't clean the wounds From the razor blades you use And its all fun and games Until you cut your veins And its all fun and games Until you die from the pain You're gonna pay for the attention you get For the names that you mention and regret Because you get drunk and upset Over the mess that you've made Covered in the blood from the cut with the blade Its all fun and games until you die from the pain Girl you want drama And I've got the show for you The airwaves are filled with shows That exploit people like you And its all fun and games Until you cut your veins And its all fun and games Until you die from the pain

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  • You missed the apostrophe in "it's" a few times. Other than that, I liked it. Yet more emo-themed work. This had some nice rhyme, though it's a bit chaotic.
    - December 11 2006 07:50:37
    • i liked it a lot, but... people who are seriously like that need help not exploitation.
      - January 08 2007 04:47:46
      • this is really good , i liked it a lot
        - February 27 2010 23:01:27