Yo-Yo

Poem written by pirate60 on Thursday 5, February 2015

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Yo-Yo

Overall Rating: 84.666666666667%

This writing has been rated by 3 members, resulting in a rating of 84.666666666667% overall. Below is a breakdown of these results:

Concept/Plot:80.333333333333%
Imagery:86.666666666667%
Spelling & Grammar:88.666666666667%
Flow/Rhythm:82%
Vocabulary:85.666666666667%
Yo-Yo Spin up, spin down; twirl around, Two wheels bound by string. With paint colored bright, even glows in the night, Truly an amazing thing. It's a toy to some, yet I say that's dumb, Why can they not see? It is joy, it is laughter, it is everything there after, It is always there for me. From walk the dog to rock the cradle, Up and over the head, I play all day, in every way, Even taking my yo-yo to bed. It is to me joy and not just a toy, A friend when no ones around. I said what I said; it's now time for bed, With yo-yo I'm dreamland bound.
   

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    #1

    pirate60pirate60

    A friend challenged me to write one in 5 minutes. He picked a topic on the spur of the moment and off I went. This is what I ended up with.
    Commented 05/02/2015 23:03
    #2

    Don RobleDon Roble

    Quite good for 5 minutes and he chose the subject.
    Commented 05/02/2015 23:59
    #3

    pirate60pirate60

    Yup. I thought to myself, A YO-YO??? Where the heck did that come from.
    Commented 06/02/2015 00:14
    #4

    Rob KosyRob Kosy

    I reckon that yo-yo really is your best friend, or at least you think he/it is. But that's ridiculous, my piratical pal. A yo-yo could never be your best mucker. Come on, how stupid would he/it feel when other yo-yo's find out? He'd be a laughing stock, wouldn't he! But you don't care.

    In-fact, I can see that poor yo-yo tying itself up over and over again and scraping itself across a pebble-dashed wall in order to disguise itself. Then when you say to it, "are you my yo-yo?' it would reply, 'I'm a frayed knot.'
    Commented 06/02/2015 22:02
    #5

    pirate60pirate60

    LOL. Good thing I have all you guys then. [Pirate grins in a Davy Jones sorta way]
    Commented 07/02/2015 11:57
    #6

    kt6550kt6550

    Well, you came up with something pretty good. Nice work, pirate.
    Commented 09/02/2015 12:10
    #7

    MissDartitMissDartit

    Haha read yo ho first, got a little confused as I read on. Had to go back and read the title again. A very good 5 minute poem Smile
    Commented 05/04/2017 18:17
    #8

    Lonelyhearts1224Lonelyhearts1224

    An other awesome piece of rhythmic poetry, great job.Grin
    Commented 24/08/2020 08:47