Humanity

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How far we have come...This writing has been rated by 3 members, resulting in a rating of 97% overall. Below is a breakdown of these results: | |
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...and so it is. all too soon,
rapidly pacing away existence
10 years ago it would not have been fathomable
to imagine such a loss
What once was constant,
is now a strain to find amongst the masses.
The good deed, an anomaly.
in it's place, a periscope of lust.
The screams of injustice that shook the conscience
are now a whisper, the conscience can not hear.
No longer do I see the eyes of a soul
instead I see a glazed look of humanity lost.
the hollow eyes walk hypnotized by light, induced by artificial evolution
A woman hurt and broken, begs for someone to listen.
but the pace is rapid, and the masses cannot hear.
A bruised child yearns for someone to see,
but the pace is rapid and the hollowed eyes can not see.
A man humbled by the loss of livelihood reaches for a hand
but the pace is rapid and hypnotically we march
cruelty, injustice, and fear rip many to parts...
and still we do not realize in our empty existence
the earth once vibrant and full of life,
is now a mechanical world of temporal desires.
no longer do I see the eyes of a soul
Instead I see the glazed look...
of humanity lost.
This one jumped out at me. I'm not sure what that says about me though???
"The good deed, an anomaly.
in it's place, a periscope of lust."
Nicely done MH
in it's place, a periscope of lust.
Great line, Hatter. This was deep, as everyone seems to agree. Remind me not to read any of your stuff when I'm drunk, will ya?