The Key to My Heart

Poem written by Raven on Monday 18, February %3

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I've been hurt all of my life Every day it was something new So I put a gate up around my heart And tossed the key as far as I could Hoping it would never be found People came very close But could not open the gate For they never found the key And one day you came down My mind saying open the gate My heart was saying forget it And then I remembered, no one can get in Without the little key to my heart Just as I was ready to leave You opened up your hand And there was the little key That little key I tossed so long ago You had found it and opened the gate And since that day I've been so happy And so very glad that it was you who found The key to my heart

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  • Good poem. Timing, for me, is a bit rough.
    - April 29 2009 01:03:48