Stupid Teen Love

Poem written by Invisible Heroine on Monday 4, October 2010

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A stupid Poem I wrote about My crush on my best friend (who's a guy)

Overall Rating: 90.1%

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My heart pounds when you are near My stomach's in a knot and instead of butterfly's in my tummy I have killer bee's. My love for you is a contradiction, wrapped in hypocrisy, tied in a big bow of lies and fake smiles. Your my best friend and I'd give up everything to be more but, at the same time I don't want to risk it at all I follow you helplessly, wherever you tell me to go because I cherish every second we're together, and if you told me to stay and wait, I would stay forever, and wait for you to come back and get me. My mind lingers restlessly on every word you say and every touch you give me. Analyzing it over and over in my mind, trying to find the meaning, hoping that the subtle things you do, mean that you like me too. I wish my crush on you was like one of those songs on the radio about teen love, and you would realize my feelings for you, and that you have the same ones too. You would take me away, and keep me, and love me forever.
   

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    Very good!
    This poem really touches with me. I love this, it expresses a lot.

    Great job!
    Thank you!