Some Poetry Fun

Poem written by kt6550 on Wednesday 29, September 2010

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An exercise for a poetry class

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This posting is for a fun poetry exercise in which I participated. The goal was to rewrite these children's rhymes, without using a certain letter. Rhyme #1 There was an old woman who lived in a shoe, She had so many children she didn't know what to do! So she gave them some broth without any bread, And she whipped them all soundly and sent them to bed! Rewrite with no W My rewrite: There was an old man, he lived in a boot, The boot had no laces, that point is moot. He traveled to the village, to purchase a heel, But first to the church, to pray and to kneel. Rhyme #2 Little Robin Red breast sat upon a tree, Up went pussy cat and down went he; Down came pussy, and away Robin ran; Says little Robin Red breast, "Catch me if you can". Little Robin Red breast jumped upon a wall, Pussy cat jumped after him and almost got a fall; Little Robin chirped and sang, and what did pussy say? Pussy cat said, "Meeow!" and Robin jumped away. Rewrite with no T My rewrite: Robin Red perched on a limb He flew down as up jumped feline Jim Down jumped Jim, as Red flew away Says Robin, "Slow feline, hey hey hey!" Red perched upon a wall, Jim jumped; did nearly fall, Red chirped and sang, Jim did respond, Meeow! ... Red flew over a pond. What do you think?
   

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    Second one is meh to me, first one I really liked Smile

    Love the idea though, something i think I might like to try.
    Pretty good stuff.I liked the first one better too.
    First one is better. Smile