Friendship

Poem written by Raven on Monday 18, February %3

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Overall Rating: 84%

This writing has been rated by 2 members, resulting in a rating of 84% overall. Below is a breakdown of these results:

Concept/Plot:87.5%
Imagery:80%
Spelling & Grammar:92.5%
Flow/Rhythm:77.5%
Vocabulary:82.5%
Our friendship is a golden chain The links we hold so dear It is like a precious jewel We remember each passing year Our friendship can't be broken Not even bought or sold We keep an understanding friendship That's worth so much more than gold Our friendship will never die No matter how far apart or old We will remain friends forever And every day our friendship stays so Very strong and bold
   

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  • Routh
    Again a great concept here. The flow is consistent until the last three lines. I could offer two suggestions to correct this:

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    We will remain friends forever
    Through times dark and cold
    And every day our friendship stays
    So very strong and bold


    Or:

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    And every day our friendship stays
    So very strong and bold
    - February 18 2009 17:16:57
    • kt6550
      I hate rating poetry.
      - April 26 2009 23:25:11