Desert

Haiku written by Routh on Tuesday 18, July %13

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My first attempt at Haiku.

Overall Rating: 92.633333333333%

This writing has been rated by 6 members, resulting in a rating of 92.633333333333% overall. Below is a breakdown of these results:

Concept/Plot:90.333333333333%
Imagery:92.333333333333%
Spelling & Grammar:98.333333333333%
Flow/Rhythm:89.166666666667%
Vocabulary:93%
Hot, arid, dry heat. Summers deadly shadow looms. The vulture eats soon.
   

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  • You know, I am getting SO SICK of that fucking vulture, struttin' around like he owns the desert. Feathered asshole...
    Oh, and your Haiku is well done. I very much dig it.
    - November 06 2006 05:08:36
    • Nice work. I like haikus. Anything about the desert reminds me of a poem by Stephen Crane, so I'll share it with you right now!

      Stephen Crane:

      In the Desert-

      In the desert
      I saw a creature, naked, bestial,
      Who, squatting upon the ground,
      Held his heart in his hands,
      And ate of it.
      I said, "Is it good, friend?"
      "It is bitter - bitter", he answered,
      "But I like it
      Because it is bitter,
      And because it is my heart."
      - December 11 2006 08:20:07
      • It always amazes me that when you string just the right words together in just the right order you can draw the clearest picture in a persons mind. For you first attempt at haiku (a much braver feet than I willing to take on) you did really well. Keep going you seem to have a real knack for it.
        - June 28 2008 17:39:35