Desert

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My first attempt at Haiku.This writing has been rated by 6 members, resulting in a rating of 92.633333333333% overall. Below is a breakdown of these results: | |
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Hot, arid, dry heat.
Summers deadly shadow looms.
The vulture eats soon.
Oh, and your Haiku is well done. I very much dig it.
Stephen Crane:
In the Desert-
In the desert
I saw a creature, naked, bestial,
Who, squatting upon the ground,
Held his heart in his hands,
And ate of it.
I said, "Is it good, friend?"
"It is bitter - bitter", he answered,
"But I like it
Because it is bitter,
And because it is my heart."