Wondering

Poem written by Natasha on Monday 18, February %4

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Sitting here thinking about you No other thoughts but you Feels like your right here Holding me, making sure everything's alright Makes me wonder. Looking outside, watching birds fly Seeing snow fall to the ground Way up there from the sky Observing the day, Become night Makes me wonder Everyone looking so happy Together at last Then a day goes by and not a care in the world Until we notice a new war has begun And yet I wonder To sit here free As I feel the pain Of those who can not feel the same way I see the anger, the shame and the horror And so I ask you, Do you ever wonder?
   

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