Crush 2

Romance Story written by Writer on Sunday 30, May 2010

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Another peice I've written

Overall Rating: 85.55%

This writing has been rated by 4 members, resulting in a rating of 85.55% overall. Below is a breakdown of these results:

Concept/Plot:85.75%
Imagery:86.5%
Spelling & Grammar:86.25%
Flow/Rhythm:85%
Vocabulary:84.25%
All day, all I want to do is stare into his eyes . . . their sparkle is mesmerizing, somehow the light always find his eyes and they shine . . . it's like I'm searching for something, using his eyes as a passagway, looking into the depths of his sole . . . maybe to an answer, to an unknown question . . . I don't know
   

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    This really could have been added to the first part. Better spelling and grammer. Keep writing.
    Oh, and "sole" should be "soul."

    But I get the feeling that this is more of a feeling of expression than a story.