Seeing Differently

Poem written by Natasha on Monday 18, February %4

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Sitting and looking at the sky, Looking as the stars are bright. My head is lost, While my mind is in flight. Looking through time, Going through my mind. Getting lost through space, Never to find my own place. Searching for my soul, Never to be found. I try to stay calm, But this shit is too strong. Still sitting, wondering where I am, Where I've been, and what I've done. Things are moving too quickly, There is no time to run. Trying to move my legs, Moving one side to the other. I try to run from all that is around me, But things are happening too soundenly. Bright yellow and red lights, Melting colours and screaming lines. I see scary images with green eyes, What's going on? Stop messing with my mind!!
   

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