A Dark Sunday Night

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This was written while my fiance and I were going through some troublesThis writing has been rated by 6 members, resulting in a rating of 94.6% overall. Below is a breakdown of these results: | |
Concept/Plot: | 93.666666666667% |
Imagery: | 94.333333333333% |
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Flow/Rhythm: | 97% |
Vocabulary: | 93.5% |
A Dark Sunday Night
A brave facade I show my friends
My heart's so very cold
I laugh and joke and smile with them
Inside is pain untold
They ask of her and with a smile
It hurts to say her name
I answer that she's doing fine
And burn inside with shame
Oh how I miss her loving arms
They tell me that they're glad
Her smell, her kiss, her love and charm
And they envy what I have
I close my eyes and see her face
And listen as they leave
My tears fall softly, my smile erased
I fall to my knees
I miss her Lord and want her now
You hold her in Your hands
But to Your will my own shall bow
And trust Your holy plan
-Matthew M. Coiner ©2005