The Bumbling Bard

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This is a poem I wrote about a character on Shadowlands II (Ultima Online Shard)This writing has been rated by 1 members, resulting in a rating of 85% overall. Below is a breakdown of these results: | |
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A fair young lass was she,
who traveled the world from sea to sea.
Not as smart as some out there,
she was followed around by her horse and her bear.
Taming animals as she went,
she actually managed to kill a hen.
The eggs she took as her prize,
but she was heading for her demise.
Into the woods, she ventured one day
singing songs as she made her way
remembering to feed her bear and her horse,
but not paying attention to her course.
Through the woods and along the beach
She decided to stop so she could sleep
In the sun and on the sand
To work on getting a better tan.
The sun was hot and the sand was warm
and nothing seemed out of the norm,
so she decided to close her eyes
when all of a sudden to her surprise
While she did lay upon her towel
around her rose great growls and howls
Creatures from her worst nightmares
seemed to appear from the air
She jumped to her feet and grabbed her harp
The rhythm supplied by her pounding heart
She sang and sang and sang some more
For she had found herself a war
Her horse and bear bravely fought
but their struggles came to naught,
Her songs calmed but a few
And she knew not what to do
As she said her final prayers
to the man who lives upstairs,
She closed her eyes and waited long
but something seemed to be going wrong
The creatures were howling and growling in fear
Something new was drawing near
A handsome man on a shining horse
He and his pets a powerful force
He scattered the creatures here and there
And some even flew into the air
He smiled at her, his teeth gleaming *ting*
'I came to your rescue when I heard you sing'
She nearly fainted from relief
and stared at him in disbelief
This only happens in fairy tales
but here he was real and hale
He took her back to the town
and warned not to wander 'round
'Avoid the places you should not go'
And one last smile he did bestow
What happened to our adventurer fair?
She stayed in town with her horse and bear
And now she sings to you this song
and though it might seem rather long
She sings with thanks in her heart
For the kind stranger who took a part
In saving her from her folly
That stranger who seemed to be so jolly
Now I bid you good night and fair well
And as you return to that place where you dwell
Remember the story of a man who was just
His name, by the way, was Simon Magus.
-MMC ©2005