Summer Shade

Poem written by Jake on Saturday 9, January 2010

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I wrote this for my cousin's birthday. It's been a while since my last submission.

Overall Rating: 88.7%

This writing has been rated by 2 members, resulting in a rating of 88.7% overall. Below is a breakdown of these results:

Concept/Plot:88.5%
Imagery:89.5%
Spelling & Grammar:88.5%
Flow/Rhythm:88.5%
Vocabulary:88.5%
A loafing cat, in Summer's shade, Dreamt sapid dreams of meals she'd made Whilst stalking lonely tracts of plain And lashing claws of frequent pain And then one day, her conscience spoke And sheathed the wrath she'd oft invoke Of crimson riving there'd be no more Her shame unbound and heart let soar These days the plains remain unchanged Of beasts and men disdain's exchanged But one's acclaimed, whose fate was paid A loafing cat, in Summer's shade
   

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    Excellent; liked this a lot.

    Nicely written.
    Very nice.